Short Film Pitch Review

Short Film Pitch

Recently I pitched my short film idea to my teacher, and I think it went really well. I developed a PowerPoint to portray my ideas on, with text ad pictures to show Kelly what I meant when I was talking. I went over the ideas and inspirations that got me to where I am right now with the idea. I made mood boards for the character design and the locations I want to use, to help Kelly and myself visualise the film before it gets made. I talked about things like the target audience to show who I would be aiming the film at. I talked about the different characters I would have in the film and where there concepts came from and what led me to give them their looks and names. I explained that the film is practically one big homage to previous action films with the style of writing and the shots I will be getting. I didn't really cover the actual story too much, which may be my downfall, so if it is I now know what I need to focus on in the future for pitches. I didn't do as much research into the little things as I would have liked to, but that can come later, when it gets closer to filming. Overall I think it went really well and I am hopeful that my short film gets picked to be put into production.

Review Of The Script

After handing in the first draft of my script, I was given some feedback from the class and Kelly. Most of the feedback was positive; however some people thought that the characters could do with some more depth, starting with John and Spike. They said that the audience would need more to become invested in his killings, making him more of a ‘good guy’, by expanding on the death of his lover. This would also tie in to making Spike a more in depth character, as it would be him who was involved in the killing of John’s girl. People also said that the dialogue needed a little touch up, so I could work on this for the second draft. There were some more logistical issues that Kelly pointed out, such as the choreography of the fight near the end of the film, and how the guns would look in the end, and I will hopefully have these dealt with soon. The script itself, the premise, doesn’t really need much changing, as it is currently shootable, except for what has been pointed out so far.